holy damn, thanks a ton, everyone! sorry it took so long to get back to this topic! these are amazing compliments and i'm glad to have eased the passing of anyone's day even marginally.
i turned this story in to my creative writing teacher (an alt. version sans Risque passages) and she liked it.
This is a beautiful game and this forum should be ashamed for letting a week pass without giving you a pat on the back for it. I hope this bit of constructive criticism is helpful.
Seriously, I really love this and have no advice for you apart from keep being you.
thank you! it is incredibly inspiring for someone with a custom title of Writer to appreciate my barfworld fiction!
Can I play this on my phone? If so I might... take it to bed... with me *EL JAMES FACE*
due to Peanuts lacking portrayals of sexual attraction, all Sunless Dominion sexuality is an expression of mutation and decay.
it represents healthy love in the same way that a corpse burping up rotgas represents oratory. i'd recommend not to take pleasure in it.
you gotta do what feels right
the tone/setting/characters so far reminds me of Lion Man, which i am also only partway through (see above), plus duh __topian sci-fi
It made me feel nauseous in a good way.
these are both exactly what i was going for! thank you!